29 Essays That Got Applicants Into HBS

Harvard Business School graduation for the Class of 2016


In all essay writing, of course, you learn that a lead, the way you entice a reader into your writing, is all important, in part, because it should generally be compelling enough to grab someone and make them want to read on. In that regard, there are some fairly grabby leads.

Consider how this young American woman begins with her family’s financial difficulties while she was in college so the admissions committee might gain a greater appreciation for the path she followed into investment banking and financial technology:

I would like to share some unusual, formative experiences from my upbringing and career which have helped shape who I am and where I would like to take my career next.

During my first year at the [United States College], my parents declared bankruptcy. The bankruptcy was caused by my father’s growing drug addiction and it had a cascading impact on our entire family. Since my parents were co-signers on my student loans, our bank refused to renew them after my first year. I did a number of things to get by, including working 3 jobs simultaneously to make ends meet. I also tried to support my dad by helping to manage his rehabilitation process as much as a teenager reasonably could. I tried to stay on top of his required check-ins and spent hours trying to locate any resources that could help him.


Or, how this American applicant who worked for an aerospace company worked in a couple of role models to kick off an essay that shared his personal and professional experiences:

Reading about Tim Cook and Mary Barra, two business leaders I personally admire, I’ve often struggled to imagine them as twenty-something Associate’s – still wet behind the gills. Yet, like everyone else, that’s exactly where they began their careers. At twenty-seven, I sometimes think that my long-term goal, to become the CEO of a global manufacturing organization like [Name of big tech company], seems like a lofty one, but in those moments I remind (and reassure) myself that good business leaders aren’t born, but rather developed. For me, that development process is a three-fold one and involves cultivating knowledge, experience and good


Or, for that matter, how this American applicant compellingly writes about a series of failures:

A wise woman once told me that I have had an extraordinary number of failures for someone my age. I’d never thought about it that way before, but she’s got a good point:

At 16 years old, I proudly started my first business, selling performance after-market parts for hobby-class radio controlled cars. I designed my own parts, contracted out the manufacturing, and sold the kits online. Within 5 years, it failed. In college, I declared my major as Mechanical Engineering and signed up for Calculus III. I failed. I landed a 3-semester internship at [Tech Company], but due to a last minute layoff, I was unable to return for my third & final semester. Expecting to work and not having registered for classes, I scrambled to find a new company for my 3rd semester, got an interview against all odds, and failed to get the job. I started a 2nd business, wiser from my teenage years, this time a real estate investment company. It failed. I ran for student body president, gained significant ground as an independent running against fraternity-backed competitors, and failed to get elected.


Then, there is this essay from an auditor and consultant who opened his submission by expressing his profound belief in education.

For a long time, my analytical left brain and creative right brain battled to define me. Am I an accountant? A consultant? An artist? A dancer? A writer? An education activist? Different words described me, but none defined me until the day I stumbled upon the term epistemophiliac: one characterized by excessive striving for or preoccupation with knowledge. As an individual with great passion for learning, I perennially seek to expand the boundaries of learning not only for myself but also for others.

The pursuit of knowledge was so revered within my household that my family named me [XYZ], which means Mother of Knowledge in my native language. My grandmother, who raised me, inspired my love for learning. Forced to quit school to marry, she was widowed at 21. Seeking financial support from a charity, she educated herself, became a teacher in one of India’s largest philanthropic institutions, and influenced the lives of thousands of students. Growing up hearing my grandmother recount her struggles and triumphs, I developed a deep-rooted belief that education is the most powerful lever in transforming individuals and communities. My belief influenced not only my academic discipline and my drive to seek a wide range of learning opportunities but also my commitment to support the cause of education at every stage of my life.


Some candidates start in counter-intuitive ways, even expressing doubt about applying to HBS. Here is how an accountant from Zimbabwe started his winning essay:

“Why would you waste your time and money? My friend scored a 780 on the GMAT, has an uncle on the Board at Harvard, a HBS alumnus dad, and she has a great job in [Big Asian city]; still yet she was not accepted into HBS. Why don’t you apply to easier schools instead?”

This was my best friend’s response upon learning I was applying to the Harvard MBA. The truth is she was not saying anything I had not recited to myself countless times; “HBS was too far a reach”. I chose to banish all doubts and instead to chase after what I believe to be the best thing I could do for my professional and social life at this stage: pursue the Harvard MBA. I would like to share briefly how I came to be where I am today.


While Wibaux’s own essay is among the 29, any identifiable elements in it are disguised or eliminated to protect his anonymity, just as all of the essays have redacted pieces. Each essay is published under a tag, ranging from “Female Leader” to “Passion For Healthcare,” and accompanied by a simple synopsis as well as comments from the writer on their approach to writing for Harvard’s prompt.

Reflecting on his own experience, Wibaux advises that applicants shouldn’t hurry the process. “The most important point is giving yourself enough time,” he says. “Having the time for introspection necessary to craft a compelling essay is probably the most important point. Before I put pen to paper, I had a lot of discussions with friends and colleagues, people who knew me well, so I could find the story I wanted to tell. That is where I started from. I dissected my life from where I lived and what jobs I had and tried to draw out key themes that represented me well.

“I started with bullet points on what I wanted to cover. I think I did 25 to 30 drafts. Some of them were tweaks. Some had a different paragraph or a completely different theme. The process of having to do that really made you think about what it is you want to convey. I am pretty sure the last five drafts were minor changes but I didn’t want to send a draft I wasn’t happy with.”


Asked to cite essays in the new book that truly stand out, Wibaux says several immediately come to mind. One was written by a female engineer on an oil rig in the Middle East. “She recounts how she had to fight her way in, sleeping in a truck because there was no separate accommodation on the drill rig,” recalls Wibaux. Another memorable submission came from an applicant who fled a civil war in West Africa and ended up in the U.S. “He had to take classes in English and had already failed at his first attempt at the SAT, but he persevered and ended up in investment banking.

“There are stories like that that have a real power to them. Others are just as inspiring in terms of the resilience a person may have shown. One that comes to mind was about a U.S. Army officer while on tour in Afghanistan finds out a fire is raging near his home in Colorado as he listens in to it helplessly over the Internet from a fire department scanner. His home ended up getting destroyed, but his wife, pregnant with their first child, was evacuated.”

What strikes him most, however, is the sheer variety of stories in the essays. “I wouldn’t say there is anything that binds them all together. That is the beauty of it. It shows that there isn’t one mold for someone to be admitted to HBS. It shows that the principle of the case study method is that you need that diversity in the classroom for a class to be enriching for everybody.

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